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Lightening
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Lightening |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Lightening, I woke up and it was cold, Lying there, duvet to your chin, I stood by the window, Watched the sun get shy Cigarette nervous maybe, But I’m not embarrassed with you. Lightening, I thought I saw you stir, Impossible, sparkle lost in time, I sat by your side, Watched your chest rise and fall You rose and fell, What on earth do I do? What earth would it be without you? And what about the debris you’ll leave behind Lost souls, when you are finally found, Not sick, just asleep, just dying but not diseased. Lightening, You wake up and smile at me, Stand and stumble to the floor, “A coffee?” Maybe, you can’t decide. A pale kind of skin, A bloody mess, but clever beauty, You go back to sleep, I can’t help you when you get like this. Lightening and just dying. Come on God, do I seem bulletproof? |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
courts, that is so sad amazing the second stanza is the best, but wow girl you know how to write. i am so extremely jealous of what you can do. you amaze me, with every post. you only get better, and your words make so much sense in such a beautiful way, your like my real life jewel. i love you and all your work. ...a bloody mess, but such clever beauty... absolutely blew me away beautiful like you LWD can you find me space inside your bleeding heart? |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
oh so beautiful. so amazing. Lightening, You wake up and smile at me, Stand and stumble to the floor, “A coffee?” Maybe, you can’t decide. A pale kind of skin, A bloody mess, but clever beauty, You go back to sleep, I can’t help you when you get like this. ah. that is so how i feel right now. so brilliant. i love you. i love your writing. <33333 The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Courtney~ I'm not so sure I totally 'understand' this penning, however I wanted to mention that I DO like THIS thought - 'I stood by the window, Watched the sun get shy' Creatively original ...  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
wonderful. courtney - this is such a sad write, but still very clever and beautiful as always. i'll be reading this over for quite a while i'm sure. you are so talented. nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Lightening is often a static burn for the children of the night. Nicely penned, Courtney. CB 8) "Only the dead, have seen the end of war." |
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