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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
I go in and out of depression for absolutely no reason.... this is something i wrote during the last attack that left me bed ridden for two weeks..... The wounds i have Are in my head People cant see them So they think im crazy Because ive tried to kill my self Because somtimes I just want to die People dont understand What i go thru They take the easy road And run away Because they think suicide is a Contaigious disease People run because of Who i am and what i stand for Why im here...... i dont really understand why im here But im not running Im staying right where i am And im facing my fears One by one...... Telling them where they can go.... . . . as far as i care..... they can all go to hell........ |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
Stay strong,,,,and look in places you never thought to look for the answers,,,,, Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
the answers lie within... "So what befalls the flawless? |
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Vagabond Member
since 2004-01-23
Posts 163 |
very good, made me think i liked the . . . . it added suspence. the answer is within the question, you just have to know were to look. Good luck Vagabon the Lost One |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
i loved this peice if you dnt mind could i save it? i know how you feel... i loved the second verse. stay strong Keep rocking  darknessPlease answer, I'm calling just to find out if you could be there for me when I crack - finger 11 |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
hey thanks all for the comments....... its coool with me for anone to save my work... this is me.... like it or not.... |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
woah You really have a skill And even tho lots of ur writing was tru, some of it i didnt quite think it fitted in with the rest like the end But i loved the end anyway As far as i care..... they can all go to hell..... Silhouetted by Deception |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
the end is basically me saying to everyone that dont like me for who i am and what i do that i dont give a dam anymore coz im done listening to all your negativeness and it doesnt worry me any more..... and never will again.. i believe that when i was taking all the crap from everyone and resting it on my shoulders was just pushing me and weighing me down into the darkness of depression.... anyway that it basically why i wrote this one and how most of my ideas are projected into words. thanks again for the comments Mel this is me.... like it or not.... |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
That's a strong conclusion. I can't say I'm impressed by the language or subject matter (it just sounds like a diary entry to me), but the message is indeed powerful. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
hey mel! i cant stop reading this one! i am attatched to it in more then one way. i love wat u sed when u replied, about the ending. how you can express all those feelings in words ios beyond me. I wish I could say stuff like that. I am having exactly the same feeling at the moment, yet when i try to tell someone, nothing comes out. you are such a strong person it is unbelievable. I am feeling the opposite from what the last person replied, i love how it just sounds like a diary entry, hoenst, open, personal and simple. please post more, i need to read something that i can relate to. thank you so much for this poem and your comment, i suddenly feel less alone. from your kiwi mate darknessYou can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
thanks darkness.... i will try post more you can relate to.... some of my work.... well actually most i need to edit because of language..... lthe way i write so honestly is i dont think about what im writing i just let it flow from whatever im writing with..... be it pen pencil heck ive even done a rough with lipstick....... this is me.... like it or not.... |
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