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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-02-24 11:14 PM

Trapped in a growth of madness,
Stretching far across the pain,
Tired with weary thoughts,
That penetrate my brain,
Confusion wrapped in terror,
That leaves me for the rest,
Dissolving into thin air,
But stay weak inside my chest,
Windy regret rebuts the fury,
My sanity agrees,
The emotions running through my veins,
Brings me to my knees,
Falling to the floor,
My sanity i lose,
Practise landing on my anger,
I know i can't be me unless i'm you.

However long the night, the dawn will break.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-02-25 04:57 PM

I like. Very awesome write. The imagery and rhyming was amazin'! ~lol~

!Vampire Kisses~

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

2 posted 2004-02-25 10:40 PM

Hey thanks Kissa~Rachelle, this is a poem that includes all these emotions and stuff that i'm feeling right now. Even though its quite short i decided id post....Thanks for all your replies to my work

However long the night, the dawn will break.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

3 posted 2004-02-25 11:56 PM

hello madame!

very nice

i liked the end

VERY SPICY

LOR (ouch sunburn)

In the bible on angels have wings, and the rest must wait to be saved - Jewel

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

4 posted 2004-02-26 01:57 AM

wow

You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson

Vagabond
Member

since 2004-01-23

Posts 163

5 posted 2004-02-26 08:16 AM

Too good to say anything about

Vagabon the Lost One

darkstar
Member

since 2000-08-09

Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA

6 posted 2004-02-26 08:02 PM

I loved it especially the last line...

Gemini
Senior Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

7 posted 2004-02-26 09:56 PM

Awesome, heartfelt and poignant, I feel like I've lived every line, but could never express it this well.

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