Dark Poetry #4 |
Easy World (paper cut pretties) |
Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
We’re dying young And we’re dying hopeless A formless weight For each others shoulders Build me a… Build me a… Build me an easy world Silence the crowds, say not a word A shot rings out, into this nothing Find…yourself…now Flashing lights and bannered eyes Left alone to learn a lesson “You found your hole and don’t your dare come out” Memories to matches All these faces are of no concern You’ll learn to love this You’ll learn to love… We’re dying spaced A generation of placeless roaches Say what you want, we can’t bother to listen An epidemic, a place to rest your head A little ending, in this ever running dread A vodka viceroy, spread your wings and die What are we being saved from? It could never be ourselves “We’ll be okay, when we want to be, not with you and not from me” Speak loud, so that they don’t hear This love, thus is life, welcome fear Fear the fact that we aren’t stable Fear the fact that we don’t try This is an always ending sorrow Push tomorrow way aside We bleed, bloody, just like you do We’re damaged and borrowed Because we’re dying young And we’re buried broken And as you wipe us all away “What can I say?” Tomorrow means prolonging What hasn’t gone away Cover my face, with another wall “Say not a word, we love you, but say not a word” These are the paper cut pretties Sit down and shut your mouth… |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Very powerful piece. Very true, real. This was worded just right, and as I said, very powerful. I especially love the lines, "We're dying young and we're dying hopeless." and, "Because we're dying young and we're buried broken." This is art. Thank you for sharing. W.W. We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves? Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell. |
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Asian Rain Member
since 2003-10-11
Posts 73 |
An excellent write expressing so well the voice of this generation. |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
This is incredibly powerful and is going to take a few reads. Amazing writing! Love the word usage. |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Thank you all, your responces mean so much to me. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
Wow, this is such a true peice. True and powerful This could almost be a song!! I love it! "Cover my face, with another wall" That has to be the best line, to me anyway. I totally feel the emotion in it, I like how you were the voice of the generation, if you know what I mean. Rock on Darkness |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ryan~ 'This is an always ending sorrow Push tomorrow way aside' I felt the despair ... and maybe, just maybe ... a ray of hope ? *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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