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xaos
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0 posted 2004-01-05 07:36 AM


DEFINED REALITY
An antelope's savage bite
A snakes kiss
A rabbits mauling claws
A lions caress
Another happy day in life

See the killers tender smile
The priests evil
The virgins tempting gaze
The whores innocence
Talking merry all the while

Hero commits the heinous deed
Antagonistic saviours
The purity of lies
The cruelty of truth
Living on to sow your seed

Twisted ruthless be the judge
The criminal serene
Crazy people always sane
Power for the good
Life's conscience never nudged

© Copyright 2004 Karl Dammer - All Rights Reserved
teenpoet
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since 2001-10-17
Posts 280
Michigan
1 posted 2004-01-05 10:31 AM


Wow...that's really good...and I hate to say this but I find it kind of funny also.  A rabbit's mauling claws?  It's just hard to imagine although i do get your point.

I only know myself...and even that I don't know well.

wintertao
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since 2003-11-17
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Okaloosa Island, FL
2 posted 2004-01-05 06:06 PM


yeah...I like your style, very nice.
xaos
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Posts 35

3 posted 2004-01-06 05:13 AM


Thanks again, i'm glad you like it

Not to many crazy clawed rabbits about I guess!

Shereen
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since 2004-01-05
Posts 57
Michigan, USA
4 posted 2004-01-06 11:04 AM


This was very cool to read.  I have always liked the contrasting - most people cannot see past their own toes to notice the differences in life and how they pertain to us all.  And by the way, some rabbits hide their claws very well!  
Well done.
Shereen.

Necro Draconis
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since 2000-05-19
Posts 115

5 posted 2004-01-06 07:44 PM


You have done what I have been trying to, just saying how you feel. Two thumbs up!

We spend our whole lives trying to live, only to realize that we don’t know what life is truly about until it is too late.


River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
6 posted 2004-01-07 11:57 PM


Irony?...something to think about here...well done

   - River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

angele
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since 2004-01-09
Posts 35
Malta (tiny island in the Med)
7 posted 2004-01-11 07:01 PM


very cool write. It really encapsulates the irony and hypocrisy of the world.With a few simple words you've managed to uncover certain truths that people shy away from or refuse to see...well done
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
8 posted 2004-02-23 03:09 AM


neat write
kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
9 posted 2004-02-23 04:49 PM


Very nice. It was funny in a way. The irony in it was great.

~Vampire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

skywords
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since 2010-01-18
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10 posted 2010-01-18 12:27 PM


Great.  I think you've captured one of mysticism's most profound insights.


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