Dark Poetry #4 |
SOUL DESTROYED. |
Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
I bled sincerely upon your cold unanswered doorstep. A soft reminder of the knife you kept so clean. Revoking memories that your soul destroyed with silence. The words long gone now, but the tears can still be seen. A touch and a glance. A thought and a kiss. You sold me your lifetime, for a moment of bliss. I rode your wild horses, too broken to run. As you hiked up your clouds and tasted my sun. The moment grew dirty and you picked up your knife. As you dusted your porcelain And fled for your life. Yet you still choke on fragments of those feelings you hated Now you're drowning: In the puddle that your own tears created. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I LOVE this! and? good grief you are pretty!! |
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axi Junior Member
since 2008-11-16
Posts 43NewYork |
blown away....great structure and great choice of words...love it |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
Thanks axi.. A bit different, and hidden away,smiles.. Thanks for calling in and thank you for your time today, I'm glad you like my poem.. Hi SEA.. you found her down here in the back galley,smiles.. If you look behind closed doors you'll find- Waste Land. I'm so glad this didn't offend,smiles.. I was dreading repercussions.. Now I'm gonna read whats been written today, otherwise I may miss something beautiful, shinning and new,grins.. Thanks SEA, for all of your giving.. I wish you could catch it and give it to all of the living.. Pretty? Chuckles.. Haven't been described as pretty since nursery school,lol.. So with that wonderful glowing thought in my heart, I'm going to depart,smiles.. |
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HeliaHeart Member
since 2008-11-16
Posts 53Georgia |
Beautiful, the word choice is very effective. I love it! ~Lia |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
Thanks HeliaHeart, its great you enjoyed my poem, I love how everyone here supports others with their poems,smiles.. its so wonderful you took the time to reply to mine, thank you.. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
interesting slice of life ms..enjoyed it |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Nice poem. I am inspired. I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality. |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
Thanks Dark Stranger and Xeonox for enjoying my poem, its great,smiles.. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Your talent is nothing to compare. You write beautifully in this poem. lol I envy your writing.. lol :P -Zach I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP |
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Inspired-8 Member
since 2008-04-14
Posts 311Pluto |
"Yet you still choke on fragments of those feelings you hated Now you're drowning: In the puddle that your own tears created." Brilliant my friend much enjoyed. vic |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
Thanks so much Vic and Zach, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem, I love all the support and encouragement I receive here, its wonderful,smiles.. |
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