DEATH BY LOVE - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

0 posted 2008-09-16 08:42 PM

THAT FACE, THOSE TEARS,
MY LOVE, AND FEARS,
THEY’VE ALL INTWINED THROUGHOUT THE YEARS.
A ROSE, A DATE,
MY DEATHLY FATE
HAVE ALL BEEN CAUSED BY LOVE AND HATE.

Saya_lost_soul
New Member

since 2008-06-12

Posts 7
BC, Canada

1 posted 2008-09-16 08:57 PM

This is an nice poem...I can still remember feeling the very same.

Dark Icy
New Member

since 2008-09-17

Posts 4
No Man's Land

2 posted 2008-09-17 06:44 PM

This is extremely true. I know how hard it felt, relationship after relationship. You really caught those feelings in words very nicely.

midnightdreamer
Member

since 2008-02-03

Posts 309
Roy,ut

3 posted 2008-09-17 06:55 PM

great poem. great emotion.

midnightdreamer

"It was heaven........right in the center of hell" Bella from New Moon

axi
Junior Member

since 2008-11-16

Posts 43
NewYork

4 posted 2008-11-18 10:43 AM

love the title and for the lack of lines in the poem, it drives the point home so quickly...love it

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

5 posted 2008-11-22 12:12 PM

perfect flow to it. Great write.

{~~*~~}

Miss.Emmalee

"Who the **** are you?!!?.. GET AWAY FROM MY LIMO!!"

The Esoteric Being
Junior Member

since 2008-07-22

Posts 34
MA, USA

6 posted 2008-11-22 10:57 PM

much passion for few words, nicely done Cherry

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

7 posted 2008-11-23 03:25 PM

Thanks to you all!! I was hoping using only a few lines would be better for the flow and dramatic point of the poem. Y'all have proved that it worked. I am very grateful for your comments.

what_hope?
New Member

since 2008-12-10

Posts 9
sc

8 posted 2008-12-13 12:18 PM

love it is a nice rythm skime and cleverly described

pandabear
Junior Member

since 2009-03-08

Posts 36

9 posted 2009-03-09 11:42 PM

WOW YOUR BEYOND GOOD!!!!

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

10 posted 2009-03-10 09:24 AM

lol Thank You pandabear

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

11 posted 2009-03-10 01:57 PM

Brevity is a good thing! You have sent a strong and clear message to your readers in few words very well. I find it easier reading in upper and lower case though if I may suggest that to you. I sent you a little something too.

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

12 posted 2009-03-10 02:02 PM

Ha! Yea if I would have even noticed I had caps lock on when I wrote this. Lol...

wolfy09
Member

since 2008-06-10

Posts 93

13 posted 2009-04-24 02:25 PM

OMG i LOVED this poem!

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.