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BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

0 posted 2008-07-04 11:13 AM

Sitting alone in the corner,
Of the darkest room in the house.
All I can hear is silence,
No cars go by, no mouse.

I can’t believe that you left me,
That’s never happened before.
So maybe that why I’m sitting here,
Bleeding my pain out on the floor.

I’m just sitting alone in this corner,
In the darkest room in my home.
And even though I know I’m wrong,
I feel that I’m all alone.

I can’t believe how it ended,
You swore that you really loved me.
I never realized you were lying,
Guess it just wasn’t meant to be.

So I’m sitting alone in my corner,
Left to die in this dark room.
I’m still bleeding on the floor,
But the pain has dulled the gloom.

I can’t believe that you hurt me;
Didn’t want it to end like this.
But the pain of losing you fades,
As I fall into the dark abyss.

If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were.

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

1 posted 2008-07-04 12:26 PM

Somehow love and blood always seem to be a common combination. Well, a good emotive write.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

2 posted 2008-07-04 02:32 PM

Yes they do...thank you XGarapanX

If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2008-07-04 11:23 PM

Brittany!!!! omg I love this... Missed having you here

and in teen good to see you back uo and posting

Krysti

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

4 posted 2008-07-05 01:04 PM

Thanks Krysti

Its good to be back

If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were.

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

5 posted 2008-07-05 08:18 PM

Wow, fantastic wirte. I know how u feel.

{~~*~~}

"You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans!...'cuase dat's just how I roll.."
{~Emily~}

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

6 posted 2008-07-05 09:49 PM

The use of death here is strangely appropriate given that the end of a relationship is a psychological form of death. You might like to use more original rhymes. House/mouse definitely needs improvement.

Thanks for the read.

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

7 posted 2008-07-06 05:32 PM

Yea but i couldn't think of anything at the time. I'm sure i'll change it latter. Thanks for the comments.

If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were.

blue face
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 92

8 posted 2008-07-21 11:23 AM

Very sad, but its lovely!!!!

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