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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Don’t take this personally I’m leaving with this machine today I’m really going to miss your voice It really got through to me My heart’s in a box on your balcony I’m going to miss your sharp eyes They saw right through me I left my axe on the moon tonight If I get too tall, please come cut me down And I think my chest moves again I was going to come talk to you tonight I was going to come and touch your hair You said it was wet with blood I’m sorry if that was my doing; I can’t remember I smiled today and I’m sure that you’d be proud This machine is taking me everywhere we said we’d go But now I’ve hit this green and can’t seem to push I’m going to miss the way you smell, so much But you’re stronger than your mother gives you credit for Told me to forget you But I won’t even try You’ve cut yourself on my memory I left some tears on the couch and I’m sure you’ll be proud You’re so…and now I’ve got to leave this massacre behind You’re so much better than I gave you credit for I shouldn’t be saying this, but please don’t take it personally This is just the blood soaking into the carpet This is just me, being me… |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
i liked parts of it but other parts i didnt. some of the metaphors seemed out of place or didnt make sense. overall though i liked it. good work. now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Tears...................................... Well I will go down with this ship |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Don't cry for me or for this. One day I might be okay, but she hurts...thanks for the response. |
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Defective Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 73Salisbury NC |
You've done it again. Taken the thoughts right out of my head and put them to words. As always, intriguing, real, and amazing. Kristi |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Thank you so much. |
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alibaster Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 299In my own private hell...(PA). |
Mad-Hatter.... Don't I know you? I know that I know the words...the spews you form... and as always....they are grand. "There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."-alibaster |
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