The End of Oblivion(working title)

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Dark Poetry #4

The End of Oblivion(working title)

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

0 posted 2008-03-28 02:46 PM

Destruction       yet again
I walk pale
      as my heart shatters
Still uncomprehensive
       of the things you said
Of what you blame me for
    Unexpecting
but always the bad guy
        Did it feel good?
Make it any easier for you?
    To pass the blame?
I'm sick of it!
   You walked on water in my mind
but i was just a boulder
   sinking into oblivion
in yours.

"Pain! With out love, Pain, I can't get enough, Pain,I like it rough cuz i'd rather feel pain than nothing at all" - 'Pain' Three Days Grace

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

1 posted 2008-03-31 08:54 PM

Kaos,
  I like this poem alot and am becoming a fan of your stuff and here's why.

There are many poets with great "poetry" skills. Their poems have great rhyme schemes and there images are clear and vivid. They right good poetry but...i forget it 5 min after i have read it.
    Then there are people who have inner skills..they know human emotion..they know how people interact with each other AND they know how to put it in to words and make others feel it too.
   In this poem the way you put into words that you loved this person and they didn't return it was just great:

"You walked on water in my mind
but i was just a boulder
   sinking into oblivion
in yours."

Keep up the good work

Yoin

SATURN
Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 78
ok,us

2 posted 2008-04-02 01:46 AM

Nice write haven't been on in a while but its good to see familiar faces

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