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Dark Poetry #4

-again for th 9th time-

carolinabeen
Member

since 2006-12-12

Posts 69

0 posted 2007-12-01 07:52 AM

they say after twenty years you just don't
have it anymore
they pray with washed-up tears that
you do not have it anymore
they put in a tray so much to not

in a word and a poet it gives me thanks
that i have it before

i should sleep
weep
wait
and try it again
i should be
speak
and still wonder

such the songs without end
begin

i still wonder

be, keep, treat
beat it all over again

i know that sucked
i know it was time

in a world and poet i tried again
u give just simple thanks to those that
tried me again

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

1 posted 2007-12-04 10:54 AM

umm your poem didn't really flow but the words were nice however kind of confused but guess you could say I liked it

Kate

mcwalker
Junior Member

since 2007-12-05

Posts 10

2 posted 2007-12-05 09:18 PM

its very full of emotion im just not sure what the topic the poem is speaking about

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