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JUST A BOOK
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
JUST A BOOK . As you drag your fingernails across each ridge You can feel the indentations where she had forced the pencil to the paper So many years ago With each swipe of your finger the ridges lost their edge, The valleys crumble and history vanishes You knew with each passing what you were doing Yet could not help yourself To feel her touch of so many years ago was too much to ignore Then suddenly there was no more You couldn’t help but cry with the loss. As page by page Your mother Slipped away Her childhood book Filled with childish angles of blues and greens Now after 50 or more years lay smudged Her actions ruined Your heart lay heavy Your selfish desires have taken forever Her moment in time Leaving just a book She wrote in once With not a true marker left To tell of her being The last book you knew she had No more of her belongings you have Lost now As is she Once God decided The day she was taken The day the vultures came As the dust cleared you were left with a book Filled with childhood scribbling For your fingers to caress To destroy Leaving just a book She wrote in once |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you are supposed to put a warning in the title if it's going to make folks cry!!!!! (not really but you should) good grief this hit my heart hard this morning...well done.  |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
Wow seeker... better than usual (and that is saying a lot!) What a way to wake up! hehe As always, I adore you... well alright... I want you for your words  Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
I'm sorry SEA, didn't mean to make it too dark but I'm glad you liked it. MM... I'm stunned!! you only want me for my words? I feel so violated.. ;-) As always thank you for your feed back, means a lot. |
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The_Nameless_One Member
since 2007-01-20
Posts 165Missouri |
just sitting here drinking Jack Daniels gourmet coffee and along comes this poem that hits me to the core of my heart very well done and very sad I had to fight crying |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
The_Nameless_One. Thank you for reading am glad you liked it. It's a strange poem really, not written in a dark form yet became darker than a midnight shadow when I finished it. |
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PoetsPlay Member
since 2007-12-22
Posts 56California |
This is really a sad poem! I had to get out the tissue box. Well done for letting the emotion come through your words and come to life! Alexandra |
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eternally_singing Member
since 2007-12-18
Posts 123PA, United States |
I am in complete and utter awe. To be able to evoke so much emotion is such an amazing talent you have. By the end of this poem I felt such a need to talk to my mom and reassure myself that she was still there because I have no clue what I would do without her. Wonderfully done and extremely heart wrenching. |
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Tears-of-Sanity Member
since 2007-09-05
Posts 121Kingdom Hearts |
Wow! my tips stood helpless as tears rolled down. I can't say how I felt as I read the poem... Many thoughts sealed within words, and a lot of feelings are stuck in my throat. I read a lot of your poems, but I tell you this is one of the best, if nnot the best of all... Thank you for sharing... L.W.~ Tears of Sanity~ |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
Thank you all so much for your responses I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Sorry for the slow reply I've been stuck in the snow without internet... such fun. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
If only every mother could leave behind a book so touched by her hands to give back to their child what will be missing when they are gone~~ M |
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fromme2U Member
since 2007-11-09
Posts 257 |
Seeker you are amazing! I love reading your poems,if I were to be able to cry I would becasue it struck right at the core of my heart. |
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fromme2U Member
since 2007-11-09
Posts 257 |
Read one I wrote it includes you. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
Thank you fromme2U. I'll go and hunt down your poem and give it a read. |
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hardcorexflirt Junior Member
since 2007-12-22
Posts 12WI, USA |
omg...i love this one so much....it almost made me cry very nice read! |
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