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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

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0 posted 2007-10-27 03:01 PM

Curiosity’s Hunger

The reaper of souls
Called the figment of eternity
Neither a good nor a bad
Somewhere where traits don’t use

Seeing a child
This being of nothing
Locked by her hungry stare
A tick in time to one as he

A mystery of deadly proportions
Irony in a glance
With cruelty coming out of a close look
To this thing called reaper

The reaper of souls
No soul has this thing
A vision of a child
To a doll doth she cling . . .

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

[This message has been edited by RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed (10-28-2007 06:50 AM).]

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

1 posted 2007-10-27 03:11 PM

wow thats really good! loved it! but suggestion on the last line...she doeth cling. u could change it to she does cling if u want. just a suggestion tho

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-10-27 03:20 PM

oh, well you see the old english, well i read it so much and listen to it it's a part of me. it shows up in much of my poetry, i kinda like it. but i'm just some strange poetic child.

-Kate

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-10-27 04:34 PM

well, Kate never expected to see you in Dark welcome

I liked this poem too...
Krysti

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

4 posted 2007-10-27 05:32 PM

it's not exactly dark, it just doesn't seem to belong in teen.

-Kate

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

5 posted 2007-10-28 12:42 PM

Loved it.

Keep "doth" as it splices into the fabric of the world that is the Reaper.

Back unto the days of yore, while keeping within the present. ;-)

The_Nameless_One
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since 2007-01-20

Posts 165
Missouri

6 posted 2007-10-29 05:40 PM

very nice well done

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