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Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

0 posted 2007-10-19 01:02 AM

OK just wrote this one.

Still wet from the rain but I had to get it out.

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I curse as the cold water glides down my back

It maneuvered through the terrain of my thick leather jacket to find my skin

As I watch the dog walk from left to right feeling my hair grow wetter by the second

I curse

I feel miserable

Until a homeless woman slowly walks on by

She tells me my dog is beautiful

She pets her then continues down the road

She wears little more than a summer dress and a thin woolen jacket

Her bag thrown over shoulder

A black garbage bag

Her shoes as far as I could see are worn well

The holes I’m sure let in more water than I could imagine

As the rain falls I loosen my grip on my jacket

The freezing waters cascade down my back shivering me to the bone

As the rain falls I envision so many others covering themselves from the cold

Under a bridge as the rain sounds like thunder mixing with the roar of the traffic above

A silent alley with a niche tucked neatly in the corner where none can see

The rain doesn’t hit quite so hard there

The old man ignoring the wet pushes up his makeshift tent of old blankets and a drop cloth snagging the branches to keep it just right

The forgotten girl

Laying in the ditch

Her eyes filling with water

Like she were crying for her own passing

As this woman walked around the corner and from my sight a tear came

For one were tears come rarely

I felt ashamed at my minor inconvenience

The dog walked on ahead

As a I slowly walked back into my warm dry home

Back inside

Listening to the constant mantra

The hum from the roof

As the rain falls upon it

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

1 posted 2007-10-19 09:41 PM

Beatiful poem

with a touch of rain

ARCTIC WIND

Twilight Warrior
Member

since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

2 posted 2007-10-20 05:05 PM

Nice poem Seeker72. Rain gives a nice atmosphere for thinking....and creating.

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

3 posted 2007-10-20 11:17 PM

Thank you both for your comments.

As one of my poems stated I was homeless once, I sometimes feel it as betrayal when I forget the rain.

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

4 posted 2007-10-23 01:33 PM

Your poem was very cute, not sure what it exactly means but i liked it

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

5 posted 2007-10-23 05:15 PM

It means that most people take things for granted.

Never had anyone tell me one of my poems was cute.

Thanks.

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

6 posted 2007-10-24 02:33 AM

This poem really changed my perspective on things. Thanks for posting this.

I also liked the transition when you meet the homeless woman. It caught me off guard and that was what changed my perspective.

Thanks agian

The more you know, the more you know you don't know. -Socrates

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Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

7 posted 2007-10-26 12:24 PM

You are welcome.

Thank you for reading.

Verg
Member

since 2007-10-25

Posts 52
Colorado

8 posted 2007-10-26 03:53 PM

Love it, eventually i will end up reading all of your poems

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