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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
her name was pearl and she was fat and sassy, the daughter of the richest family in the neighborhood, the one that had the paved driveway and a pedigreed dog. her mother did pearl’s hair in shirley temple curls that drooped in stringy ringlets when the sweat from fatty pores ran down her cheeks and neck. her patent leather mary janes were never scuffed from playing, but the strap across her chubby instep wouldn’t buckle til the cobbler punched another hole at the very tip. she couldn’t fit in children’s clothes but wore flowered women’s dresses purchased from the catalog and finest department stores. she ruled the street like rich kids do, played games like treasure hunt, and truth and dare that took no grace or stamina or required that she run. life for her was really golden, an overflowing plate, with the best of everything until the day the doctor told her mother, pearl had to lose some weight. no more mac and cheese, fried chicken or the creamy home made ice cream that topped the pies and cakes we envied her mother baked each day. poor pearl was devastated by the poor man's portions on her plate, soon a gnawing hunger took all her rich girl pride away. pearl did the washing up, and after every meal took the garbage to the pail behind the corner of the house. weeks went by yet pearl never lost a pound. in her flowered dresses, looked fat as cabbage roses. you can see it coming, the moral meant to still the grumbling of the hungry homeless and salve consciences of those too cheap to toss a bone to charity. in conclusion's tiny nutshell, the moral of this tale is sometimes even fat rich girls eat out of garbage pails. [This message has been edited by JenniferMaxwell (09-23-2007 07:02 PM).] |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
lovely ARCTIC WIND |
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kjb New Member
since 2007-10-17
Posts 7Australia |
Hi Jennifer, I throughly enjoyed this one, the images are clear and you don't waste the reader's time with unnecessary words. Sometimes the flow can be improved by not using the same word too often. her name was pearl and she was fat and sassy, the daughter of the richest family in our neighborhood, they had a concrete driveway and a dog of pedigree. I hope you don't mind me playing with it, i was trying to get rid of a 'the' or two |
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