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Dark Poetry #4

solitary rooms

JenniferMaxwell

Member Elite

since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

0 posted 2007-08-23 06:40 AM

did you choose it willingly
your life in solitary rooms
of mindless chores
that kept us at a distance
as you dreamed
of the world before

your days were spent
bleaching linen, a magdalene
pinning it out in the cold air
of your perpetual winter?

did you know the role
that came with the bridal veil
would smother the roses
of creativity covering
the fragile walls of your sanity

with dickinson like poetry
that comforted you in your
motherless childhood?

did you not see her footsteps
in the shadows you chose to follow
as you crossed the bridge
to self-destruction

or in the innocent eyes of your children,
the stones you were leaving them,
a legacy of guilt and fear
on which to build their own history
of solitary rooms?

[This message has been edited by JenniferMaxwell (08-23-2007 11:52 AM).]

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

1 posted 2007-08-23 12:43 PM

oh nice..very nice.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

JenniferMaxwell

Member Elite

since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

2 posted 2007-08-23 03:19 PM

Thanks, Susan. First draft and very rough, but I have hopes for someday.

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

3 posted 2007-08-23 04:48 PM

ohhh this one drips with despair...he he...I like it !

Yoin

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

4 posted 2007-08-24 10:10 AM

I, for one, enjoyed this

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2007-08-24 07:57 PM

This is good, Jen.

You wrote it like you've lived it.

Love it.

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