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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Up in the morning,all covered with dew. thinking which way,to turn the screw. Clouds in the sky,wondering why, there's not a dish,left to dry. Birds in the tree, waiting for me, to fly up to Heaven, set myself free. Circle the globe, dressed in a robe. Like a wayward comet, with no frontal lobe. Dying to live, living to die, another revolution, for a piece of the pie. What goes up, must come down, if it lands of my head,I'll be wearing a crown. Sun in the morning, Moon at night, that's why it's divided,between black and white. Light a candle, to chase the dark. Gather the animals and board the ark. Pray for rain, to float the boat. Then throw overboard, the cell and remote. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
Encourage Critiques: No |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
sorry about that...I do actually encourage input. |
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The_Nameless_One Member
since 2007-01-20
Posts 165Missouri |
Exquisite yet I dont' quite know what to make of it. Would you please delve down to the very core of this poem for me I would really enjoy getting into the depths. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
Sorry for the delay in responding moondogz, been away for a few days. Your poem was interesting, yet it felt forced at times. I'm not a great fan of rhyming poetry, still I liked it... even though I wasn't really sure what it was about in some places. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I really like this. It is noce to be in Dark again  Krysti ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Thank's everyone for your remarks. All I know about this poem (Nameless One) is this; I was upset about the Isreal/Lebanon situation last year, while I was sitting at my desk the first line popped into my head. I wrote it down and the rest followed, this is how it works for me...when I "try" to write poems nothing happens. Hope this offers some insight...thanks for allowing me to share. |
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The_Nameless_One Member
since 2007-01-20
Posts 165Missouri |
That's cool that is how I write also atleast recently anyways I have a couple to post today sorry I didn't respond sooner I went away for awhile. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
I've gone through quite a few poetry web sites, I read and read again the RULES and the LAWS for how poetry should be written and how it should be set out. In my honest opinion poetry is so random that, that is what makes it so beautiful. Poetry is heart, it is love, hate, anger and every other emotion you can think of. To give it laws, rules makes poetry nothing. If you have to give a small explanation for why you wrote it so be it. |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
To give it laws, rules makes poetry nothing Good point...I agree Seeker72. |
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