Dark Poetry #4 |
Divine |
Neo Junior Member
since 2007-08-08
Posts 13 |
That feeling I do divine, across the universe of my mind; to gaze into the only thing that matters at this very moment in time, and it is you, the one I gaze through, with my naked eyes. |
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Twilight Warrior Member
since 2007-02-22
Posts 106The World That Never Was |
This is a good poem with the potential to become better. I'm not very good at critiquing work but, try to lengthen it next time. "One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came" |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
I liked this one alot Neo. Says much in little space. ( Not really a dark poem tho |
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