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green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-11-30 06:19 PM

Black
It all goes black.
As if a swollen sore

Am I dissappearing
I am still here
Maybe a lack of courage,
faith,
maybe more.

The entire world seems to be gray now
They all have gone away
Given in to practical concepts
Impratical in pratice

It fades away
This life we love, live,
what we are
Slowly it all drains in a pipe often refered to as reality

I can't sit here
I can't watch myself fade away
I'm not dying
Pulsating hope
In the pounding of my heart

General public
My old friends aren't

Turn this around
Be happy and free
For once free of the weight of myself

Closed will remain closed until opened.

[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2003-11-30 10:20 PM

I know.
I know this feeling.
"Am I dissappearing"
Somtimes I ask this,
and hope that it's true.
I wonder why I'm unhappy,
then feel like I have no right or reason.

Anyway...
I liked your poem, it stirred feelings,
as you can see.
thanks for sharing this.
~Lex

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2003-12-01 09:50 PM

thanx for reading.

GIS

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[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

3 posted 2003-12-01 09:55 PM

"I can't sit here
I can't watch myself fade away"

couldn't agree more with this...nice write =)
ttyl,

- River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

xmutexelationx
Junior Member

since 2003-05-16

Posts 15
AmongstTheCharredFieldsOfSnow

4 posted 2003-12-06 02:23 PM

"Pulsating hope
In the pounding of my heart"

I really enjoyed this piece.. thanks for writing it.
I'll be looking for more.
[sara]

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

5 posted 2003-12-06 05:05 PM

I'm glad everybody enjoyed it. Thank you for reading. I was once told that I looked like a dork for replying to posted messages on my poetry, but that must have been an opinion not worth taking note of and putting into practice.

GIS

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[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-12-07 06:27 PM

Craig:

this is so insightful
not only a look at yourself
but at society , as well
and never be ashamed of replying
shows you care
*smile*
well done

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

7 posted 2003-12-08 12:25 PM

if only i could be as strong as that poem
The entire world seems to be gray now
They all have gone away
Given in to practical concepts
Impratical in pratice

could it be any truer1!!!! omg!!!
i wish i could be strong and make it all go away but it aint easy!
ur work is sooo good GIS!

have a good one
darkness

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

8 posted 2003-12-08 11:11 AM

THanks once again for your kind replies. It makes me feel good seeing that others enjoy my work.

GIS

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[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

9 posted 2003-12-10 06:17 PM

i liked this one greeny, powerful, kind of made me think of a bruise that tkaes a while healing then turns yellow and grey and is all ugly, not your writing of course, but the mental imiage of wanting hope...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

10 posted 2003-12-11 09:37 AM

kinda funny I titled it "Destined" huh? lol

GIS

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passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2004-05-17 04:22 AM

sigh

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