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hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2007-07-05 05:54 PM

I see you every day,
with scars fresh from last night,
I can't think of what to say,
that would make anything alright,

What can you possibly be going through,
that you think you'd be better off dead,
Never thought twice that I was like you,
But I wasn't that gone in the head,

looking for some poor way out,
you found with razor blades,
No one else can see your doubt,
your eyes are hidden well with shades,

I just wish you'd get some help, like me,
So you don't end up insane,
I'm not asking you to be happy,
But it's not worth all this pain.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Alaina
Member

since 2007-06-16

Posts 106

1 posted 2007-07-05 08:17 PM

i REALLY loved this...it was great and it had such emotion. i was able to relate to it too. great job

I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky, but why can't it be mine?
-Eddie Vedder

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

2 posted 2007-07-21 12:18 PM

Wow hunnie! I really liked this. I guess i missed it before

So i'm comenting(i think i spelled that wrong...) now. Loved it

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

StormyB
Junior Member

since 2007-07-18

Posts 42
Ohio Usa

3 posted 2007-07-21 04:35 PM

excellent! I enjoyed this very much.

luvnh8rbalanced
New Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 6

4 posted 2007-07-21 05:53 PM

i LOVED this. it had feeling, and i could relate to it as well. you could feel the emotion coming from it.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

5 posted 2007-07-23 07:33 PM

tx you guys

hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Abbeon
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since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

6 posted 2007-08-01 05:48 PM

If only Eddy could read this his scars are getting worse i wish hed understand. i wish we could help.

Abbeon.

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

7 posted 2007-08-04 10:19 PM

You know, this actually brought tears to my eyes, don't ask me why it just did. I've read lots of poems that surround this sort of thing but this one has touched me.

As usually you've created something incredble and full of feeling.

LotsofLove
Kira

~Should the truth be so buried
in the endless cemetery of broken dreams?~

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

8 posted 2007-08-05 08:59 PM

"No one else can see your doubt,
your eyes are hidden well with shades,"

Very nice wording, sun glasses can cover all of your self doubts leaving one to wonder at your actions.

Loved it.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

9 posted 2007-08-05 10:14 PM

thank you all... and Becca, I wish he'd stop too. Are they really gettign worse? i haven't seen him for so so long.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

littlefairy
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since 2007-08-06

Posts 51
New York

10 posted 2007-08-07 12:22 PM

wow this was really really interesting. I enjoyed how you showed you understood where the person was coming from but that you didn't expect that much from them that you only wanted the best. Or at least that was my interruption very well done.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

11 posted 2007-08-07 03:45 PM

thank you for your reply. you interperted it right. Exactly the point i was trying to get across. thank you for reading.
Krysti.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

jossal
Junior Member

since 2007-09-15

Posts 23

12 posted 2007-09-16 03:31 AM

A true poet...

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