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Sir_Vampire
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since 2007-06-12
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0 posted 2007-06-18 05:50 AM



The distance between us is killing me
to be in ur arms would set me free
you loved me for who i was and am
my love is tangible and i give you every gram
of what i never dreamt of giving another
i ask myself why it is u even bother
to love a lost heartless soul that is me
what is it that you in this shell can you see
you want to exchange vowels with something torn
someone so broken tattered and forelorn
you would say till death do us part
and when that time comes i will give you the present
to show you how much your love to me meant
till death do us part...
the present is my heart

you watched me bleed you watched me die you watched me not even a bat of your eye

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BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
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1 posted 2007-06-18 10:54 AM


I really liked this It flowed very nicely and had a good rythm to it. Nice write.

Life is not a matter of destiny, but a matter of choice.

Alaina
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since 2007-06-16
Posts 106

2 posted 2007-06-18 11:15 AM


wow, this one was really great i love the ending
blue face
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since 2007-06-03
Posts 92

3 posted 2007-06-18 11:45 AM


I love it!
just like brittany said the poem flows
nice write.

Sarah


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