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Dark Poetry #4

An Entertaining Act

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

0 posted 2007-06-04 11:50 AM

its just an entertaining act,
the way you feel for me.
your love always leaves me cold,
but you still can't seem to see.

you twist the knife in my side,
and leave me alone to die.
you watch me suffer as i speak,
drowning in my lies.

Sacrifices you say you give,
though it is not true.
you say i owe my life, my love
that something is still due.

but nothing i have done for you,
seems to be enough.
all you do is hate me,
when all i give is love.

you have drained me of my life,
but again i will not cry.
break me yet another time,
and watch me try to fly.

just leave me now,
i need you not.
and still you come to haunt me,
your love is all i want.

suposedly i'm selfish,
i think of very few.
but that which you think of me,
happens to be you.

father you mean nothing to me,
i wish that it weren't true.
but even as hard as i try,
it's so hard to hate you.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

1 posted 2007-06-04 06:19 PM

oh, a painful poem girl. the ending was great. keep it up.

as long as we laugh out loud, laugh like we're mad. because this crazy, mixed up beauty is all that we have.

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

2 posted 2007-06-04 06:46 PM

thanks

Sir_Vampire
Member

since 2007-06-12

Posts 96
Johannesburg

3 posted 2007-06-14 08:35 AM

In all honesty this brought a tear to my eye, a marvelous write. Truly brilliant write

Taking a drag and watching the world through tired eyes

tearsofpain
Junior Member

since 2007-05-03

Posts 38

4 posted 2007-06-14 04:12 PM

WOW the last verse was beautiful i loved it
i took this one personally

Aj1992
New Member

since 2007-06-15

Posts 5
England

5 posted 2007-06-15 03:53 PM

wow that was great i liked the way you were able to add the rhyme with out it sounding forced, good job keep it up

ladylisa
Member

since 2007-04-29

Posts 342
Florida USA

6 posted 2007-06-16 04:52 PM

This is incredible and so well written. You have expressed feelings that are genuine and very deep. I love this poem. Can't wait to read more of your work.

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