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Abbeon
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Curiousity, and wonder

0 posted 2007-05-28 09:07 PM


You are blind, and I, I am your guide.
We walk along the narrow path twisted and filled with decay.
The path leads us to a narrow street where shadows line the doors.
The buildings are as black as the evil rooted deep beneath are anguished soul.

The shadows hunger.
You feed them with your worries, your fears, your terrors and your bloodied thoughts.
Still they hunger.
Will you feed them more?
They hunger for your flesh your blood your bones your soul.

Do not step of the path!
The images you see are false.
The images dance in front of your sightless eyes; they are images you can see.
The shadows reach out there long skeletal hands and try to reach your hands.

Up ahead there is the temple.
We walk along the path twisting and turning as the shadows call.
They call out in there piteous moans calling for you to pause and listen but be warned.

For if you do stop to listen they will spin there lies like a spiders thin web.
And you will be caught fast.
Then they will devour your body mind and soul

Almost there do not given what they say is lies they are desperate.
Soon you will reach the temple and they may lose there control on you.

We pass beneath the gates of fear.

These are not unlike the gates of hell.
The red colour here comes from the stains of blood from many years.
The blood from those who were too weak.
There bodies torn apart by the unforgiving shadows.
The corpses left lying by the gate.

I remove the blindness and your eyes regain there sight.
For the first time since we left the mountain you can finally see.
The sights, the sounds and the disgusting smell finds you.
You look and seeā€¦

© Copyright 2007 Rebecca Mackie - All Rights Reserved
Abbeon
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since 2006-11-30
Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder
1 posted 2007-05-28 09:14 PM


STOP (Stop)!!

Okay first i am so SO SORRY for the looooooooooonnnnnggggggg wait.

Second if you have not read the path to fears door PLEASE do this is a three part three choice poem and the path to fears door is the frist.

And Third i will gladly answer all questions unto this and all my poems if you would like

Okay thats it folks please enjoy

Ps tell me any poems you would ike me to read please.

Thanks for your time
Abbeon

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2 posted 2007-05-29 03:23 PM


ok ok I see now... haha great visuals liked this alot.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

ladylisa
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since 2007-04-29
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3 posted 2007-05-30 07:34 AM


Been down this path and your vivid description states it so well.  It's nice to finally pass through the gates of fear.
BrittanyJ
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Come find me?
4 posted 2007-06-03 03:49 PM


I liked how visual you were! This is a really great poem!
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