Dark Poetry #4 |
Can't, Won't |
stormdancer Junior Member
since 2007-05-10
Posts 31state of confustion |
Can’t cry, won’t wake, cause I won’t try Can’t sleep, won’t eat, i’m in too deep, won’t die, can’t live, I won’t say goodbye though the climb’s gettin steep... Can’t fall, won’t step up, i’m so small won’t move, can’t scream, ain't got nothin to prove, won’t do it all, can’t focus, Is it so bad to fall? why stuggle to improve? I can pray, and pray I do, God get me though today. I’m trapped, help me, before I adapt, What do I say? I slip, on the ground I lay, Wait, I’m still here, oh God i’ve snapped... Mind’s playin tricks again, i’m gonna fall soon, but when? I’ve been fallin for so long, shoulda hit the ground, maybe i’m wrong? world’s startin to spin, I close my eyes, tryin to find some calm within, I know you’re strong, catch me, pull me along. I’m standin on a cliff lookin below, time pulses, the world begins to slow, Can I go on, and face another day? To the edge i’m drawn. sunrise sets the world aglow, but I don’t see it, i’m seeing how close I can go to the edge without falling. I’m pretty far gone Won’t heal, can’t die, the world’s surreal, can’t think, won’t decide, though i’m standin on the brink, my pain is real, gotta bleed to forget how I feel I can’t swim, but I won’t sink. Can’t cry, won’t wake, cause I won’t try Can’t sleep, won’t eat, i’m in too deep, won’t die, can’t live, I won’t say goodbye though the climb’s gettin steep... |
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The_Nameless_One Member
since 2007-01-20
Posts 165Missouri |
Good for a first post you can improve on the rhyming the rhythm is great I like it a lot you should try using a wider vocabulary for your rhymes |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Welcome to Passions great first post although it was a lottle long I still loved it hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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