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Dark Poetry #4

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Kitherion
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since 2006-08-01

Posts 181
Johannesburg

0 posted 2007-05-03 12:57 PM

The eyes swollen,
The face bruised,
All because she let one fall.

The coffin closed,
The earth shoveled,
All because she cried.

"Our Father who art in Heaven... Hallowed be thy name..."

Kitherion
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since 2006-08-01

Posts 181
Johannesburg

1 posted 2007-05-03 12:58 PM

I know it's short, but the meaning is deep.

"Our Father who art in Heaven... Hallowed be thy name..."

tearsofpain
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since 2007-05-03

Posts 38

2 posted 2007-05-03 01:19 AM

very nice i like it short and to the point its great

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-05-08 12:53 PM

yes really deep, and short I loved it

hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

buttercupbaby
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since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

4 posted 2007-05-08 05:18 PM

i like this alot.. its short and to the point, no beating around the bush.
i like that

lovergurl
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since 2007-05-08

Posts 59
va

5 posted 2007-05-08 10:58 PM

love it. short and to the point!

Becca.

ladylisa
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since 2007-04-29

Posts 342
Florida USA

6 posted 2007-06-06 07:49 PM

Very deep and I really enjoyed that it only took a few lines to express a lot of depth. Thanks for sharing.

blue face
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 92

7 posted 2007-06-11 08:27 PM

cool poem I can really relate to that!

trUstNooNe
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since 2006-05-21

Posts 91

8 posted 2007-06-11 09:46 PM

Short and To the Point...Very Nice

Sir_Vampire
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since 2007-06-12

Posts 96
Johannesburg

9 posted 2007-06-12 04:40 AM

Very nice Kitheron, i believe we are aquainted in person

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