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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
Lifeless That is how I feel in life dreamless that is how I sleep I watch people go in their life I watch the pains in their life I watch them fall in hurt I see happiness I see anger I see pain I see the things they don’t see They don’t see me happy They don’t see me angry They don’t see me They don’t care They only see the things they care about things dear to them, that’s all they see I see everything I can’t help them for I myself haven’t been heard I haven’t been helped I can’t help them I hear them cry out for help I hear them breath I hear them they don’t hear me they have lives that mean something to them I don’t have a life meaningful I am useless, I am lifeless I don’t have a meaning in life you do so make your self heard make your self seen Don’t be me black beautiful eyes looking back at me showing me, no fear will show. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
wow i feel like this all the time. honestly i dont like this feeling but its just me and i try to get rid of this feel but i just cant... i really like this poem. great job! ~Zach~ |
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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
thanks! glad you can relate. i hate feeling this. it just hard to avoid. midnightdreamer black beautiful eyes looking back at me showing me, no fear will show. |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
Good job.... again, the inconsistency in the rhythm is my only issue. Even lack of rhythm can have a certain consistency. ~~~May~~~ |
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megaskull Junior Member
since 2008-02-04
Posts 11 |
Now "I" see! Thanks for this grand affair.  |
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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
May, when i write poems i just get on the computer and start to write. thats why you don't like it. Hehe oh well. thanks megaskull. midnightdreamer black beautiful eyes looking back at me telling me, no fear will show. |
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eternally_singing Member
since 2007-12-18
Posts 123PA, United States |
I can definitely relate to this feeling. It is not enjoyable in the least but it is always a comfort to know others feel the same. Well done. Knowledge is power, power corrupts, study hard, be EVIL! |
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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
thank you. midnightdreamer black beautiful eyes looking back at me telling me, no fear will show. |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
awesome write |
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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
thx. midnightdreamer She past you, but doesn't notice you. |
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turbulent_melody Junior Member
since 2008-10-01
Posts 22Australia |
I thoroughly enjoyed this read as well. I am fairly new to poetry, therefore the lakcing rhythm didn't strike me immediately, however I can truly relate to the feelings that you have expressed. |
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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
thx. midnightdreamer She past you, but doesn't notice you. |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
i have related to this feeling many times in my life. i truly enjoyed your poem. |
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Dreamflight Junior Member
since 2008-10-22
Posts 15USA |
I've definitely felt like this too...(by the way, "yourself" is one word)  I left it all behind, and never said goodbye... |
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