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Dark Poetry #4

A Roughhewn Existence

renathon
Junior Member

since 2002-06-09

Posts 23

0 posted 2007-03-04 02:08 AM

"A Roughhewn Existence"

My depression is all-encompassing and omnipotent,
It swallows everything good.
It is vast and fearsome like the ocean,
A cavernous sadness I am lost in.
With its extensive tentacles it sacks the land around me,
It incurs the swelled King of Solemnity.

-Renathon 2006

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-03-07 01:10 AM

Well that was an amazing description and I can relate to this well... I love this...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2007-03-20 12:09 PM

These lines are very descriptive:

My depression is all-encompassing and omnipotent,
It swallows everything good.
It is vast and fearsome like the ocean,
A cavernous sadness I am lost in.

A nit on this line:

With its extensive tentacles it sacks the land around me,
..maybe you mean "sucks"?

It incurs the swelled King of Solemnity.

I'm not really sure what this means??

Twilight Warrior
Member

since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

3 posted 2007-03-20 05:41 AM

So much meaning in so little words. Nice work.

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