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Dark Poetry #4

Rapacity in Black

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

0 posted 2007-02-27 12:03 PM

In my soul the darkness looms
reaching out to touch my face
with cold hands of doom
tracing my eyes
freezing them in its space
licking my mind with lies.

In my heart the hate cries
seeping out through the crack
with sweet reprise
devouring me in its track
in the fires
of rapacity in black.

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."-alibaster

"If it doesn't bite, scratch, and make you bleed it isn't worth it"-alibaster

RavenSmith
Member

since 2007-03-02

Posts 53
Oregon

1 posted 2007-03-03 03:38 PM

I am surprised that you havent received more comments on this poem. Its wonderful. Loved how my mind explored here. How the freezing or the hold that takes place in our mind, when life has wounded us. Great poem, flow and enjoyed the depth in this.

~Best Regards,Raven Smith

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

2 posted 2007-03-04 12:45 PM

*Bows* Thank you very kindly and I am glad you enjoyed. Been a long, long while since I have been here.

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."-alibaster

"If it doesn't bite, scratch, and make you bleed it isn't worth it"-alibaster

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

3 posted 2007-03-05 04:15 PM

A really well done piece. Really nice flow to it as well. This poem should be more to the top. I look forward to seeing more from you. Keep on fighting.

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