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Dark Poetry #4

Despondence

Draugluin
Junior Member

since 2006-12-08

Posts 48
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2006-12-11 11:30 PM

“Despondence”

I see her lost in a gaze
In her eyes, the sun’s going down
And rain falls in gray far away
I’ve seen her, so I’m happy this way
Recalling a day before today
The peaceful bliss, of a mornings’ kiss
In a summer way, the warming rays
Through her eyes, the sun’s streaming in
My heart struck the ground, fell all the way down
She’s always nice to me, like ice

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2006-12-13 12:22 PM

~Through her eyes, the sun’s streaming in
My heart struck the ground, fell all the way down~
this part was amazing i loved it...
~She’s always nice to me, like ice~ and the last line was strong i could feel it very nice

hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Draugluin
Junior Member

since 2006-12-08

Posts 48
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2006-12-13 02:18 PM

Thanks hunnie, yeah I liked the very last line most... In fact I wrote it first and think it describes the rest, like when your always happy with someone but then they are always mean to you.

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