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Trauma
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since 2006-11-19

Posts 9

0 posted 2006-11-19 11:39 PM

Hey just a poem I wrote about a situation I'm currently going through. It's pretty dark and a bit long, anyway here it is. It's the second poem I've wrote about this girl, I'll post the first as well.

This Familiar Night

I am never quite sane at night
Thoughts of you are on my mind
Just thinking of you in that blue shirt; you looked so small and lovely
Thoughts of you in that white dress are too painful to bear
Yet my heart betrays me and I can think of nothing but
What was that noise?
I get up to check
It is nothing, as always
I look out my window, squinting my eyes
I can almost see her
I can almost see her….

The thought of you coming to me in the night, needing me
A foolish dream but I can’t help it
I wonder when next I’ll see you
This phantom hope disappears once I close my eyes
I sink deeper into my chair
Maybe I’ll call you when day has rescued me from this familiar night
I’ll call you and you won’t answer
That is the promise of tomorrow
That I can count on
That and the certainty that just when I think I’ve figured you out
And that I can live with the fact that you aren’t going to love me, you always surprise me
Just when I think I’ve reclaimed what’s left of my pathetic, little life, you decide to show me some affection that would make me so happy if they didn’t open new and more painful wounds
Because I know that we are going to play this old painful game, all over again
I try to believe that finally, this time, you will open yourself to me, and we can explore the world, together
With Love being what we could find
You find new ways to break my heart every day, and you’ve found another
Am I just a random thought that drifts in and out of your mind from time to time, or is there something else there?
That is the mystery I will contemplate tonight

I wonder if you ever think of me
If fond feelings of affection ever enter your thoughts as you try to find sleep
If somewhere in the deepest recesses of your heart, an image of me rests there
A sad smile crosses my face as I drift away

I am never quite sane at night

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2006-11-21 01:10 AM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! well i'd have to say the first line amazing i can relate a bit to that very well written i like how you repeated the last line at the end too it fit nicely. although this part:

~The thought of you coming to me in the night, needing me
A foolish dream but I can’t help it
I wonder when next I’ll see you
This phantom hope disappears once I close my eyes
I sink deeper into my chair
Maybe I’ll call you when day has rescued me from this familiar night
I’ll call you and you won’t answer
That is the promise of tomorrow
That I can count on
That and the certainty that just when I think I’ve figured you out
And that I can live with the fact that you aren’t going to love me, you always surprise me
Just when I think I’ve reclaimed what’s left of my pathetic, little life, you decide to show me some affection that would make me so happy if they didn’t open new and more painful wounds
Because I know that we are going to play this old painful game, all over again
I try to believe that finally, this time, you will open yourself to me, and we can explore the world, together
With Love being what we could find
You find new ways to break my heart every day, and you’ve found another
Am I just a random thought that drifts in and out of your mind from time to time, or is there something else there?
That is the mystery I will contemplate tonight~

seemed a little jumbled well the lines were too long compared to the rest. hope to read more soon though...
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

secret_truth_lies
Member

since 2006-11-14

Posts 74

2 posted 2006-11-23 11:02 AM

I liked this one alot. I thought you did a great job on this. I hope to see more from you in the future. Thanks for sharing with us. I hope to see more from you soon.

CrEaTuRe
Member

since 2000-01-01

Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia

3 posted 2006-11-23 10:54 PM

WELCOME to Passion

Liked ure work and look forward to reading more of it

Jazvina Lahre aka CrEaTuRe

Love CoMeS To ThOsE WhO Still HoPe AlThOuGh They've BeeN DiSaPpOiNteD,To ThOsE WhO StiLL BeLiEvE AlThOuGh ThEy'Ve BeeN BeTraYeD,LoVe KeEpS ThEm GoInG

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