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Dark Poetry #4

The Gates Of Hell

Sorrow
Member

since 2006-06-14

Posts 83
Ireland

0 posted 2006-10-16 09:29 PM

Heaven smiles above me
mocking my descent
The tear streaked angels laughing
at my hoarse lament...
The demons pull me under
thick and putrid strife
clinging to what's left
of my weary life
the grip around my ankles
the rasping in my ear
the mouth of hell is waiting
a vision of blurry fear
To kick and scream is pointless
for I'm nearly at the gate
The fallen one is waiting
Oh Christ spare me this fate...

***

"Take my hand, my child"
He whispers loud and clear
"The one above has forsaken you,
But I will always be here!"
Faced with a decision
the darkness or the light
Something stirs inside me
and I contort and smile
He flicks his tongue and laughs
"You have chosen well"
Now hand in hand
we descend,
into the fiery depths of hell...

[This message has been edited by Sorrow (10-18-2006 02:06 PM).]

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

1 posted 2006-10-17 10:58 AM

Holy cow!

To kick and scream is pointless
for I'm nearly at the gate
The fallen one is waiting
Oh Christ spare me this fate...

This was incredible!!!
(Where'd you learn to write like this?!)

Finally something that is really dark. (and sorta creepy)

Wonderful write! Insant fav!!!

~Kira

Sorrow
Member

since 2006-06-14

Posts 83
Ireland

2 posted 2006-10-17 11:05 AM

thank you. glad you like it!

Walter Poe
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 787

3 posted 2006-10-27 06:20 AM

Nice dark post, good dark images. I liked this it was my kinda poem the devil has all the best tunes and the best poets.
From one who knows.

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

4 posted 2006-10-27 07:45 AM

Wow dark. Good, this was soo good

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