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Dark Poetry #4

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KuruShio
Member

since 2003-11-18

Posts 110

0 posted 2003-11-18 09:26 PM

What is beginning,
the persuit of our goals.
But is it winning,
selling our souls.

The endless Dreamer
The stricken Child
Without dreams mindless,
Without control wild.

So many years,
so few days,
so little cheer,
nothing holds sway.

a brokendown palace,
a shattered ice castle.
and a girl named alice
holding the chisle.

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.
KuruShio (DeadlyBob)

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

1 posted 2003-11-18 10:33 PM

Beautiful poem...wow. Nicely done.

KuruShio
Member

since 2003-11-18

Posts 110

2 posted 2003-11-19 09:19 PM

thank you Mad_Hatter

i think i enjoy people enjoying my writeing more than writeing itself

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

3 posted 2003-11-20 11:12 PM

nice write

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

4 posted 2003-11-21 11:28 AM

But is it winning,
selling our souls.

Enjoyed the direction of the write.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

5 posted 2003-11-22 11:17 AM

interesting piece

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-11-22 11:39 PM

Kuru,

you took me through the looking
glass there
*smile*
xxoo

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