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Alone in the dark
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since 2006-02-10
Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

0 posted 2006-07-02 08:17 AM



I feel like I'm trapped
on a merry go round
I'm spinning in circles
not making a sound

But I want to cry out
I want someone to hear
I need to be held
I need someone to care

It's just so confusing
this life that I live
I wish I could feel
I have something to give

But inside I'm empty
so lost and afraid
Bound to this life
by the choices I've made



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Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
1 posted 2006-07-03 02:57 AM


I think we have all felt like that sometime or other. It's good you can express it with words.
gyrl_blue
Junior Member
since 2006-06-15
Posts 20
Stuck In Reality
2 posted 2006-07-03 04:08 AM


some days I feel open to feelings, saying to myself anything better than being numb... then when it all becomes renewed i remember why.

Bound to this life
by the choices I've made  

I think ^that says it all :) nice write A.I.T.D

-No Stranger To The Rain-

Digital_Hell
Member
since 2006-06-05
Posts 202
Amidst black roses
3 posted 2006-07-03 07:55 PM


A good write, you put down the emotions i feel a lot very nicely!

"But inside I'm empty
so lost and afraid
Bound to this life
by the choices I've made"

i loved that part! I have felt that way so often! Its funny how a lot of our work echo each other.

hells gate reads Abandon hope all ye that enter here
shall we go?
the road to hell is paved with good intentions.
Will you walk with me?

Alone in the dark
Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss
4 posted 2006-07-04 07:54 AM


I never realized there were so many people like me out there. It's tragic how so many can relate.

   ^*^Angel^*^  

  

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
5 posted 2006-08-01 12:36 PM


i reaaaly love this. this is amazing, the rhyme was soo flowing and not at all forced. great job with an awesome ending.

peace
lor

as long as we laugh out loud, laugh like we're mad. because this crazy, mixed up beauty is all that we have.

lace_of_light
Junior Member
since 2006-08-02
Posts 44

6 posted 2006-08-02 04:36 AM


i know exactly how you feel. affliction is probably my middle name (and with it comes a lot of confusion). i love the poem and just try to think that you're not black, but grey. i can't seem to reach white (happy)...

"areyouinorareyouout? eitherwayyoucan'twin." he said. "butthefallwillbefantasticandwhat'sleftisnothinglessthanperfection"

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