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Dark Poetry #4

The hardship of worship.

niere
Member

since 2006-04-23

Posts 77

0 posted 2006-05-22 04:20 PM

Lord,
How does my voice sound?
I think...it is deformed...
Can you even understand me?

Or, do i
Possess a liars tone and rhythm?
I truly believe i must because

Lord,
You don't believe me
When i profess my faith to you.
When i tell you,

That i love you.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2006-05-23 06:53 PM

Yeah, sometimes that is the way it feels, but He listens and He's happy with you.

-GIS

balloons are made of rubber...
... and they float too...
as will I to Heaven once I die...

niere
Member

since 2006-04-23

Posts 77

2 posted 2006-05-24 01:21 PM

thank you

kif kif
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since 2006-06-01

Posts 439
BCN

3 posted 2006-06-03 03:34 PM

Brilliant title, niere, and 'how does my voice sound? I think it's deformed' really got me interested, a clever play on the senses.

Thanks for the read.

Digital_Hell
Member

since 2006-06-05

Posts 202
Amidst black roses

4 posted 2006-06-06 05:24 PM

very nice niere. that trully expresses how i feel.as if you are unworthy of god.

harriate
New Member

since 2006-08-02

Posts 8

5 posted 2006-08-02 06:53 PM

I have studied the works of G.M Hopkins. This is very similar. Do you aspire to create such poetry?

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