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Mommys screams |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
Laying alone still with fear Hearing sounds no child should hear Sounds of violence a scream, a shout Savage anger bursting out Creeping out into the hall Huddled down beside the wall Tears of pain frustration too Nothing I, a child, can do Gone to bed still awake Too much more than I can take Tears may dry scars may mend But will my hatred ever end? Still hear sounds block them out No more pain no more doubt Thoughts and feelings left behind I've gone away inside my mind |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Enjoyed the flow and rhythm of this. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
Thanks Susan. I'm glad you liked it. *Angel* |
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trUstNooNe Member
since 2006-05-21
Posts 91 |
ive been there too.very nice write.i've stopped thinking about it,but somehow it always comes back for me to think on..i like your poem alot! |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
You're right. Sadly enough, it does always come back *Angel* |
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niere Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 77 |
Very nice poem.... the rhyme is great... But don't you just sometimes wish you could rip the memory out of a person? Oh well. A brilliant and heartfelt piece. |
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rockbabe Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 105 |
Only someone whom have lived through this type of life expereince can write about something so hurtfull. The pain will end when you stop it....you are in control of your own feelings!! Great Write!!!! |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Oh what we wouldn’t give to be able to erase I memories! It did have great flow in it, which I loved. Sometimes it’s hard to find poems with flow like this, I mean, not here on pip, but … well, yeah… nvm This poem was awesome btw! It was so sad though when you read this you just have to cry for the little kids out there that see this happening you wish they didn’t have to go through such pain… I think that the way you worded this captured the reader and made them feel for the child. I liked that about poems, how you can read them and have things come alive in your mind and appear so real… Great write on this one, I loved it  @-->--- |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
"Thoughts and feelings left behind I've gone away inside my mind" what a beautiful, haunting poem. And, might I add, if this is a true story, what a strong person you must be. MUCH LOVE. ~cheye |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
I was the child I wrote about. And unfortunately, I don't feel like I am a strong person. All too often, I still feel afraid, helpless, lost. But maybe someday........ ^*^Angel^*^ |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
You express yourself very well. I can relate to many of your lines in this poem. Writing I believe is an avenue to healing. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
WOW, I Really Like This, And So Many People Can Relate. Great Write! I Thought of You Today, |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
Thanks! Songbird, you're right. Writing is an avenue to healing, but I still have a long way to travel on that road. ^*^Angel^*^  |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Angel,I read this earlier and printned it out in fact. So sad and yet we know too many go through this as you have. Hugs to you and hope all is well. martyjo |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
Thanks martyjo. It's nice to know people care. Alot of days I have to remind myself that there are some good people in the world. I guess I've known too many of the wrong ones.  Angel |
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