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Dark Poetry #4

This 'Feeling' System

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2006-02-04 12:39 PM

Screaming his name,
On the top of the roof in the rain,
People are murmuring to me,
Just kick back and wait.

Sitting quite alone,
Under the bed with the torch light shining,
People are yelling to me,
Go out and get it.

Walking in a crowded street,
Daytime and yet a little overcast,
People aren’t speaking to me,
At all.

Head bent down over a piece of paper,
What the hell to do…?
People don’t know anything,
And neither do I.

[Not such a great write, but it's how I was feeling so bear with me. I promise better goods next shipment - Courts.]

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

deadkiss
Junior Member

since 2006-02-11

Posts 31
washington

1 posted 2006-02-11 09:39 PM

i like the ending. people don't know anything and neither do i. i often feel that everyone is stupid and realized i feel like i am too and that i dont know anything.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

2 posted 2006-02-13 10:51 PM

i think this is really honest. you havent over thought it which is good.

i can relate

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

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