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vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2006-01-24 06:08 AM

The rain clouds gather overhead
as i wake to a grey sky morning.
but theres a smile on the horizon
it belongs to you.

I skinned my knee when i fell for you
aching to take your hand
pull close in a warm embrace
hold my tight enough and maybe
i won't shatter.
Fragile like the china stored
up high on your Grandma's shelf
keep it out of reach for anything
so beautiful
simply can't be tangible.

though you beg to differ.
with your double meaning words,
those mixed messages you use
wires crossed, and the war may be lost
between my head and my heart...

My heart a romantic caricature
exaggerating all the things you are
to me.

And these words fall dumb at the edge of my lips
silent i hold back, what i most want to scream out.
my caricature heart wishes to be yours
but you've no want.
you hold dear somebody elses.

I skinned my knee when i fell for you
but you weren't there to heal it with a kiss.
your lips already on that somebody else.
not mine own.

The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2006-01-24 11:42 AM

Kirsty~

This is a lovely piece ....
and this is a killer line -

'the war may be lost
between my head and my heart'

... lost that battle a time or two in my own life~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - [email protected]

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

2 posted 2006-01-24 08:11 PM

your
B-B-B-B-B-BAACKK!!
and excellent we are

"My heart a romantic caricature
exaggerating all the things you are
to me.

And these words fall dumb at the edge of my lips"

this was gorgeous. espesh the last line i highlighted. mm mmm mmmmmmm!

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

3 posted 2006-01-25 12:41 PM

I'm listening to Alanis. I thought I'd tell you that. I think stuff him.

I loved this muchly.

Maybe now, you can write about my cat.

I hope you get what I mean by that.
Courts.
Hollow.

Lots of love.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

desert-spike
Member

since 2006-02-01

Posts 194
TX/USA

4 posted 2006-02-01 06:11 AM

That was, astonishing, me thought.
Your poem beings to life the secret beauty in heartachem which we all dread, yet revere.
Or maybe it speaks to me, because it feels like home, or a place that used to be home.

Anyroad, I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

5 posted 2006-02-01 04:31 PM

thanks muchly xo

The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return.

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