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Starsfalling
Member

since 2003-03-18

Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows

0 posted 2003-10-27 10:18 PM

She’s going away
And taking happiness with her
I’m alone
Empty within, empty without
Waking every morning
Only to ask
“What’s wrong with my life today?”
Never once caring
Then we’re at school,
You dance just out of sight
As I fake a smile,
That no one notices
Take no note,
As I drown in thoughts of my own demise
Finding solace in my last moments
To late for healing
To late for prayers
You took it all away,
With one last kiss…

-lance

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

Asian Rain
Member

since 2003-10-11

Posts 73

1 posted 2003-10-28 06:15 AM

"You dance just out of sight"

What a wonderful line to express the idea of trying to recapture a dream!

Asia

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

2 posted 2003-10-29 07:57 PM

Waking every morning
Only to ask
“What’s wrong with my life today?”

This is a very excellent poem and as for those lines, one day I think we have to wake up and realize that the only thing wrong with our lives are ourselves, happiness is a choice (I for one can't seem to make it)...nice write, thanks for sharing.

Starsfalling
Member

since 2003-03-18

Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows

3 posted 2003-10-29 10:18 PM

your very right mad_hatter i have realized that this morning as a matter of fact... i wont tell what i did yesterday but lets just say it was an eye opening experience... i woke this morning and realized i could either let everything drag me down or i could get above it all...which i am begining to do

today i am happy, not fake happy but real happy...sorry had to share that with you all

thank you asia and i loved your poems

-lance

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-11-08 01:37 PM

sad

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