Dark Poetry #4 |
Do you not see? |
Pluto Junior Member
since 2005-07-12
Posts 12 |
Underneath the twinkling stars, Do you not see my jagged scars? Amongst the leaves tipped with dew, Do you not the see the blood that flows anew? In the field of swaying poppies red, Do you not see my heart is dead? Lost in the beautiful mist of the moors, Do you not see my burning sores? |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
I really like this one.. |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
I enjoyed this one. The fourth and fifth lines have one too many syllables. I thought it ended a bit abruptly, but I liked it. |
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