Dark Poetry #4 |
And we are lost (mechanized lover) |
Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Everybody needs a moment to decide Whether their momentary lover is really alive Your transgression was an excuse to fly This is the point This is the place This is the time This is the point This is the place This is the time Where you lose yourself again Meteors for hearts and steel toned eyes “I’ve been loving a machine” she said “He likes to pretend to be me” she said A speaker is a one-way communicator Cut the wire and fall the elevator “I’ve been loving too clean” she said “He likes to pretend to be” she said A speaker is a one-way instigator Take the wire to hang me later This is the point This is the place This is the time This is the point This is the place This is the time Everybody needs a reason to survive In the moment where they realize they’re not alive Your enlightenment was an excuse to die Because this is the point And this is the place And now is the time To lose yourself again A machine has a heart that can’t give back “I’ve become a machine” he said “She likes to pretend she loves me” he said My plug is releasing itself from socket Light the fuse attached to the rocket “I’ve been faking a human” he said “Somehow she always knew it” he said My plug is released now from socket Strap me on the flaming rocket This is the point This is the place This is the time And we are lost and we are lost |
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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
wow...damn that was deep...awesome write man...phew left me breathless -lance There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
This is simply awesome. I can picture it being a Powerman5000 song, or some other hard rock group...but as a poem, its very beautiful. ~*~I'm a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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Soul Sepulchre Junior Member
since 2003-10-19
Posts 29Tennessee, USA |
I agree with Dragon - you should give that over to PM5K and let them make it a song. :-P, it's amazing, purely amazing. You've got real talent. Jeremy - |
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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
haha yeah actually i totally agree...i love pm5k so i hope they would...cuz this would totally rock as a song There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
:P you guys are all too kind, that would be really cool if a band turned this into a song though, maybe one day I will. The inspiration I get lately, comes mainly from the mars volta, I suggest you give them a listen, thanks all. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Wow, this is the best poem I have read in a long time. thank you so much for sharing, it meant alot to me, and it's going in my library. W.W. |
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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
very well done! i really enjoyed it. there are 2 ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it. -unknown |
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swow finix Junior Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 14here but nowhere now |
wow - i love it. a great peice of work in every sense. i thought that your use of machine metaphors were awesome. swow finix ~be who you want-belive what you want~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Mann had Major Tom there for a sec . . . lost in space . . . Hatter this also reminded me of Rush . . 2112 . . the entire second side amazing . . . xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
speechless... |
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