Dark Poetry #4 |
where are you now? |
silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
where are you now? it's been a while since i last saw you and i miss your face will you come back for me? take me away in your arms where i am forever safe? how far have you gone since i last said your name? called it out to the night in hope that wherever you are you will hear me and scream my name back when will you return? to take my hand and kiss all my pain away tell me everything's okay? everything's okay when are you now? its been too many miles since i last held your face will you come back for me? can you find me space inside your bleeding heart? |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
another good write..not as strong.. I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
yea this one was me trying to get out of a very long writers block... went on for months actually! definitly isn't one of my strongest, no. can you find me space inside your bleeding heart? |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Sometimes our weakest poetry can show our truest emotions. When we don't think about it too much and just let the feelings and words fit into place. Don't pass a poem off as not good enough, if it came out at all, that's a testiment to the human spirit. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
that was amazingly honest i fully agree with what Mad Hatter said im here without you baby nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
any time that we can pour our emotions onto the page, it becomes GOOD poetry. Very well done. |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
I'd agree with the other comments complicity isn't necessarily better, sometimes simple and right to the point is the truest form of expression. A good write tho "I go to parties sometimes until 4, it's hard to leave when you can't find the door..." Joe Walsh |
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