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darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

0 posted 2005-02-06 11:22 PM

*This ones a bit similar to my last entry, "Dismissed". Please note it is not related to self-harm in anyway. thanks for reading. Sophie*

Crying bloodied tears
from destructual wounds
wounds
wounds
tearing through arms
and jaded hearts
broken
so
so
broken,
lonely to. small and cold
you're so superior
so mighty
in front of me.
I'm shaken with
intimadation and anger.
handcuffed, dark and sullen,
to your light and radiant
smile.
screaming lies
or screaming truth
it doesnt matter
as long as your screaming.
rub out my frown
and pencil on a smile
so you can erase it
as you please.
Your Da Vinci Eyes
smirking, hiding a secret
knowing something
but not letting on
knowing
knowing
knowing

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

1 posted 2005-02-06 11:28 PM

awesome. im absolutely loving your poems lately. they are so full of emotion! brilliant.

keep it up
laura

you're the only one keeping me alive

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

2 posted 2005-02-07 10:57 PM

THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL!
Oh how I love your writing. It's so emotional...and sad...but I really love reading them. Ah. I hate being speechless. It's taken me half an hour to write this.'Third packet of pink smokers, you can't blame me. *burp*

Ok.
Really loved it Soph.

Hollow.
Courtney/

And the legacy runs from needles to guns
And no one's immune to the pain
From Marilyn to River Phoenix
From Elvis to Kurt Cobain

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

3 posted 2005-02-08 09:42 PM

....................................................................................... speechless. only the best poems render me speechless..
i flippin' loved it... god your writing makes me envious! lol

love kirsty

I am a wilted black rose. Searching for cracks of sunlight, to nurture me. And to help me grow.

tecoyah
Member

since 2003-11-16

Posts 83
NY

4 posted 2005-02-12 09:15 AM

That was a powerful, and inspired treat.
If this is what to expect from you.....I will be looking through the archives for more.

I think you have a very good understanding of when to use repeat wording to interupt the meter.

Thank you

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

5 posted 2005-02-12 10:58 PM

Truly artistic. Drawn, scraped, etched and pain. I like it.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

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