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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2005-01-30 07:48 PM

Broken, again
In the dark my mind reaches the same,
Same old thing
Close the curtains and let my shadow fall
Weary onto a bed.

“You ruin everything you get.”
Was said.
The shattered silver charm illuminated
In my palms.
I tremble, my fists shaking by my sides
The point lost in the flurry of words,
They hurt.

The door opens
I wipe my cheeks of tears
I say nothing and you leave
Unaware,
That I was there.

Mirrored on the glass
My face, the same,
Same old thing.

And the legacy runs from needles to guns
And no one's immune to the pain
From Marilyn to River Phoenix
From Elvis to Kurt Cobain

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

1 posted 2005-01-30 11:12 PM

crap that one hurt.
so sad

dude that killed me!!!!!!!!!!!!! maybe the fact that i was listening to "Hallelujah" by Rufu Wainwright didnt help either.

good poem, very strong

l&e
(IM SEEING YOU TOMORROW) *excited face*

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

2 posted 2005-01-30 11:53 PM

wow. that was beautiful
brilliant imagery, seriously.
all through that i was wishing i could write as brilliantly as you. you are truly amazing.

argh school tomorow... bring on fourth form i say... ah back to the hell i call westlake!

laura

you're the only one keeping me alive

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2005-01-31 01:06 AM

That was pretty cool. I kinda liked it. It was pretty cool indeed. Nice write.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

4 posted 2005-01-31 10:20 AM

it did indeed rule, courts, and hurt as well. i understand this broken feeling all too well.
very nicely done, indeed.

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

5 posted 2005-01-31 06:26 PM

woah courts that was so awesome.. it was so darkly beautiful, and almost eery the girl is so broken. it hurts reading these sorts of poems though. try something happy and uplifting

anywho..
*note to sophie: if you want to hear "hallelujah" how it's meant to be sung... listen to the Jeff Buckley original.. it's 10 times better than the guy who covered it.*

Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

6 posted 2005-02-01 01:27 AM

Soph: Glad I got to see you today, been missing you. "Hallelujah"? Is that the one on the last ep of the oc, first season? I'll find out....Thanks for your commets. Means so much to me.

Lor: I love this saying now: keep on keeping on. You can get through school by seeing me on the weekends

"hint hint", like I siad to Soph, thanks for replying. Honestly, you guys here make me feel so much better.

Craig: Lol thanks, I kinda liked writing it.

Mike: Should I be happy there's a friend who understands? or sad that someone else shares the same feeling. Always appreciate your comments.

Kurst: I love getting replies from you, you make me feel so good. The girl.....actually you know I was told that I ruined everything I get, from a person I admire. I meant to write about how I just sat in the dark and I felt better when everything else around me was yelling or being sarcastic. It didn't work out that way though. Thank you so much, off to read your new masterpiece now.

And the legacy runs from needles to guns
And no one's immune to the pain
From Marilyn to River Phoenix
From Elvis to Kurt Cobain

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

7 posted 2005-02-04 03:42 AM

(*pssst note to KURST... if YOU wanna hear how the song is ACTUALLY meant to be sung, and the ACTUAL original, listen to the writer's version, Leonard Cohen. i hate it how people think jeff buckley wrote it.. and i myself prefer rufus' cover, even though jeff's cover was rated best cover of all time. Cohen's the legend behind it all though, don't take his credit!)

you're the only one keeping me alive

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

8 posted 2005-02-07 01:51 AM

Oh wow
Your face is beautiful
More so than is seen
In that damn mirror
This was triumphant.

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

KuruShio
Member

since 2003-11-18

Posts 110

9 posted 2005-02-08 05:14 PM

This is a peice worth merit, into my library you go.

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