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spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

0 posted 2004-12-08 11:10 AM

To go through life
Day to day
With no memeory
Of whats passed

In constant darkness
Night or day
Still
Always
Loseing her way

All weapons lost
All hope gone
All life
Was sucked away

She still lives
But its unconsious
Because
She have no say

They bring her back
But yet
They lock her away

Behind closed doors
Behind cold bars
This childs gone away

And in her place
Thoughts and emotions
Run by monsters that play

And no one knows
What goes on inside
Why she feels she has to pay

No one will
Understand
Or give her the time of day
She's not what
They think she is

They don't know
She's changed
She's turned away
From their fake love

And turned to
S@t@ns hate
Because she knows
They will accept her
The monster that she is

She might be living
She might pretend
To be
Who they want
Her to be

But shes living
Uncounsiously
Not knowing
Not going
Not growing

No knowing
Whats going on inside

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2004-12-08 11:13 PM

Has a smooth bubbly feel to it. Smooth in some areas and then choppy in others. One question, why does she let everybody live her life and depend on all the negativity?

-GIS

let God ROAR,... in power...

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

2 posted 2004-12-08 11:50 PM

They don't know
She's changed
She's turned away
From their fake love

best bit i think

yeah i agree with GIS on the choppy in some areas and smooth in others

had some bits thats just sort of rambled a bit.

i liked it all in all

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

3 posted 2004-12-09 09:08 AM

"why does she let everybody live her life and depend on all the negativity"

its all she knows how to do and all she can depend on. the negativity. its whats always been there. all that makes sense. the reason its choppy is because i was rambling. just wanted it all out. later people.

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

4 posted 2004-12-09 11:26 PM

why doesn't she learn something new? Like read about good things, make art, or... its somewhat like my situation. I live with people and they don't complain the entire time, but it is quite often. Lots of negativity at times, and actually I am happy, now its just aggravating. Tell her about God. He loves her. Its what makes me smile.

-GIS

let God ROAR,... in power...

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

5 posted 2004-12-17 08:04 AM

GIS first she is me though you prob already know that. and i dont belive god anymore. i cant he hurt me to much. and everyone around me drowns me in negitivity....i dont do it to myself all the time. i dont even know why im explaing this to you. later.
Static

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

Copperbell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

6 posted 2004-12-21 08:36 PM

I don't think she's a monster - and I hope she finds something to smile about today.

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