Dark Poetry #4 |
Denial |
vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
*this is the other part to my poem "inside"* You're trying to laugh again now But it's bitten back by tears. Is smiling the new answer? To believing that everything isn't falling apart. But i see right through the smiles and i see the hurt inside. Why can't you stop spending all that time on pretending that everything's alright. And now you won't stop hurting, someone that you've stopped loving yeah, you've grown to hate yourself. Is hatred the new answer? To believing in a reason, for what you just deny. And your friends are looking on, they agree that nothing's wrong, and you know you're all alone. "I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Good poem, loneliness feeling coming out, but the ending was the best part of the whole poem. How many times....? "And your friends are looking on, they agree that nothing's wrong, and you know you're all alone." That was really great writing Kurst. Hollow. Courtney. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
OMG kirsty. that was AMAZING! dude O M G woooaaah i LOVED that so much. SO MUCH. u r so talented. omg. ah. ah. ah. AWESOME ENDING, AWESOME REPITION, OMG JUST AWESOME! LOR you're the only one keeping me alive |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
inside denial. ya went 'n outdid yerself with this one!!! much love, mike of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep. |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is amazing kurst... it finishes off inside.... this is definitly one off the best ones you have written.... keep ones like this coming... so emotional, and in depth to what you are trying to get across..... always here for ya Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
Something about this time of year makes us even more vulnerable... "And now you won't stop hurting, someone that you've stopped loving" Oh sorrowful words, I know you well. Vampiana: Thank you for sharing your gift and your heart. "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm" |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
I really like the last stanza. Friends can be just that way... but, a good friend will be honest. Reading what you have written here, I think that you are truly being a good friend. -Bob |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
*speechless* *gonna stay slient with awe to not ruin the moment* *omfg that rocked so hard. wow i cannot express how fluckin amazing that was. my favourit of all time of your writings.* *wow* *shuts up and goes into a corner to reflect on that poem* *oh and by the way you were voted in our french class as most likely to grow up and getting a writing deal and sell millions of copies of your books or poetry anthologys and live in a beautiful house with a husband who loves you* love and empathy nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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