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cusick
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since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

0 posted 2003-10-20 05:29 AM

The beaches were littered with corpses
slaughtered that very first day.
the sand was red
with the blood of the dead
a sweet sickly smell of decay.

Those that were left,
shell shocked, bereft,
far away from the
land of their birth,
surrounded by foe
they had nowhere to go,
trapped at Gallipoli Bay.

The moon shone that night
on a terrible sight
of scavengers fleecing the dead.
There was no defence
nothing made sense
that night at Gallipoli Bay.

The battle raged on,
the Turks knew they'd won,
bullets landed like rain
on our poor men in pain,
the blind, the insane
our hero's at Gallipoli Bay.

Asian Rain
Member

since 2003-10-11

Posts 73

1 posted 2003-10-20 07:32 AM

Good write!

Asia

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

2 posted 2003-10-20 01:46 PM

Thank you for replying Asia

Soul Sepulchre
Junior Member

since 2003-10-19

Posts 29
Tennessee, USA

3 posted 2003-10-20 03:14 PM

I'm not sure what it was about this one, but it sent chills through my body as I read it. It fit together pretty well, and got firm mental images across in a short time. I'm impressed.

Jeremy -
Hate me now forever more...

eor
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since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

4 posted 2003-10-20 04:17 PM

nice write, painted a very vivid picture, when i first started reading this i thought it was about vampires then when i read about bulletts it became clear that this was some kind of war, i not sure what yet, but very good write

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

5 posted 2003-10-21 05:32 AM

Thank you Jeremy and eor. This was a battle in the first world war where the British, french, Russian and Australians fought the Turks in a battle to clear the Dardinellesbut unfortunately the turks won. Maggie

paraboxer
Member

since 2002-11-10

Posts 121
Maryland, USA

6 posted 2003-10-21 06:37 AM

Great poem, you capture what the troops at Gallipoli must've felt well.

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

7 posted 2003-10-21 01:40 PM

Thank you paraboxer, will there ever come a time when there are no wars. Maggie

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