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Dark Poetry #4

Holding Still

peaceful_dreamer
Member

since 2003-04-25

Posts 159
SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW

0 posted 2004-10-05 01:24 AM

I'm holding on to a feeling

                grasping, shaking

                holding still.

A spark I thought had ended

                bursts into flames

                burning, consuming

                all live from within.

An ongoing disagreement

                unrelenting, unforgiving

                living in fear.

A flower blooming late

                dies from poison

                tearing, killing

                any remaing ashes.

I'm holding on to a feeling

                broken, shattered

                holding still.

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

1 posted 2004-10-05 03:32 PM

jennifer,

deep breaths . . . deep breaths . . .

beautiful writing

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

2 posted 2004-10-07 10:35 AM

...and your form in this one furthers its beauty. Great poem with great choice of imagery.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2004-10-07 12:21 PM

Is it all really this bad? I'm not trying to be sarcastic, but its a line of hurt and torture that builds so much. And the next thing we reallize is we have feelings like this. Nice write.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

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