Dark Poetry #4 |
love me just a little longer |
silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
im alone again and my heart is overflowing with pain of needing you one more time one last breath one more way of telling you how much i care so you don't leave me so im no longer cold every night while i lay awake listening to the rain pitter patter on my window and thinking of you as i cry needing you so much my hands shake and i need to hold on to something for fear if i dont i'll fall deep into nothingness sinking into my own reality of you not being near and i cant stop wanting you for all i can do is think of how you used to be there even when i wasn't myself you were there by my side oozing with love with care with appreciation and those moments make me ache with the realisation you arent anyway near me and i ask for just one more moment with you so you can love me just a little longer so i can love you so much more *dont like this one. just tryna vent put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
like it or not, it was a hard-hitter for me. exactly how i feel for someone right now that time and circumstance, and distance and everything makes our union iffy. gave me reason to pause. nice way of being saddening. i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I love this. It reminded me a lot of, well, me. I couldnt have written this better myself. It brought back a lot of pain, but its good to know, that i am not alone. I think i will save. Karisas I ask why, but in my mind, I find i cant really rely on myself. ~~~Linkin Park~~~ |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
You know, some say...it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all. Sad, but I think it's true. And this poem, just made me think to that saying, don't ask why....I liked it, especially the shaking hands. Not shaking hands when you meet with another person and you say "Hi, I'm Todd (if u r todd) nice to meet you" the trembling hands. I'm making a mess of this! Nice work, touched. Hollow. Courtney. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
ooo as i have said before....... the best poems are those which are just vented feelings and scrambled words. i love l&e darkness nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Laura, and what an amazing vent it is: for all i can do is think of how you used to be there even when i wasn't myself Good Lord, I KNOW. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
if this is what you write when you are just venting...write every time you vent, because i absolutely ADORE this poem...its so brilliant and beautiful in a dark sort of beautiful..and..wow...my favourite..my favourite..! Kirsty. "Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko |
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