»
Archives
»
Dark Poetry #4
»
Deface the child
| Dark Poetry #4 |
|
Deface the child |
|
|
Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
The theatre of cracking eyes Cut my finger on the blades of seething Sleeping to the moans Of the swarming dead They will hold you to your word Awake the drowned Given faces to perform And abide the burning masses You witness to dissention In the way we brag our tolls Untwisting all the bodies From these mangled walls “And he will see us through, tonight” This is the night that we decide The moment we all gather To deface the child… The theatre of cracking eyes Cut my finger on the blades of leaves Indulging in these window frames A display of the swarming dead Accountable for fleshless homes Awake the burned Given faces to perform And abide the drowning masses They sing through broken stomachs Of the things they’d hope to dream Each word another nightmare Keeping rotting hands at bay A wish to feel the water Clawing at their feet… “And he will see us through tonight. Hold our hands before the bite And he will walk us to the stars…” I never said I’d play the game But in the end, we’re all to maim |
||
| © Copyright 2004 Ryan - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
A gothic resonating sound in my ears. Nice. I especially like this stanza or verse: They sing through broken stomachs Of the things they’d hope to dream Each word another nightmare Keeping rotting hands at bay A wish to feel the water Clawing at their feet… and the part about the rotting hands is the line I liked best. Thats ingeniuos. The hands are falling apart and on top of that they can't reach anyway. Thats awesome. Just a matter of time and their won't be anything left to reach with. And you or whoever won't have to worry anyway. Loved it. GIS add* He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11 |
||
|
darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
love it amazing talent coming through on this one love the "almost" repitition used. stunning nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
||
|
Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Thank you for your responces. this is by far one of my darkest pieces. I hope you enjoy. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
