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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Note: Ok, this is not fancily worded, it's not great poetry either. But I don't know how to change it, because it feels right, and because it feels true. If I opened my mouth, Nothing would come out Because nothing’s wrong, I wish there were though, Nothing’s wrong. I know it. But I can’t show it. I could rewrite this sentence To tell you I am sad, In so many dictionary picked words, But it seems so artificial, When all I need to say, Is… I’m unhappy. Even then, you’ll laugh, And ask me why, Maybe you’ll know, When I can’t reply. “How are you?” How can I reply? When you expect an "I’m fine"? “I’m sad, I’m unhappy, I hate everything, I don’t know if I can live like this any longer,” Startled expression, “Why?” Laughter mingled tears, “I don’t know.” I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
No need to rewrite this one. You said it very well. Ya' know I remember a long spell of that when I was a teenager. Turns out I only focused on me. When I invested my focus outward, everything changed. It's easier being an old fart! Peace...  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
wow loved it i don't know either i just dont know loved it wow LOR put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Thanks for the reply. Ha it might just be that Larry, being a teenager. Hollow. Courtney. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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